
He tried to be as still as possible, peaking through the leaves, wondering if they were still out there.
They were still out there, still sailing, still looking for him.
Why couldn’t they give up? Why couldn’t they accept that he wasn’t there anymore? Surely some evidence told them so.
He faked his own death. He took his clothes and shoes off, pretending that the sea finally got into him. That he was giving up all hope and succumb to the pressure that was building up for the last couple of years. That he could not take it anymore.
He had planned it all, the spare clothes, the new passport, new identity, new beginning in another place. He just had to be patient and wait for the search to finish, lie low in this island with enough supplies to keep him through while waiting.
Did he do the right thing? Would he be able to start again after what he had gone through? Did he just give up everything? (150 words)
https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2015/05/05/fffaw-week-of-05-06-2015/
https://authorsbmazing.wordpress.com/2015/03/11/finish-it-5/
You are doing a great job with this writing challenge. Love it!
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thanks, Momma 🙂
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I love an intriguing story. This one leaves me with so many questions… Nice work!
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Thanks, Sonya 🙂 so many questions that needed answering…
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So many questions and such a sense of finality to his life and the hope of a new one. Well done Lady Lee.
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Thanks, Michael 🙂
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Great story! It has a nice tension build-up and leaves the reader wondering at the end. Nicely done.
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Thanks, PJ 🙂
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You’re welcome!
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Interesting! Will be a great continuation.
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thanks, Mandibelle 🙂
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Okay I need to know what was going on in his life that he was so desperate to escape
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hi Donna 🙂 guess the story continues so we can find all the details…
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Reblogged this on Author S B Mazing and commented:
Oh, I wonder if he will get away with it…
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suspense….suspense! 🙂
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🙂
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Scheduled for tomorrow morning. Well done and keep it coming 🙂
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thanks 🙂 my pleasure!
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great story!!
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cheers! 🙂
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Great suspense story! I’m wondering what kind of pressure caused him to get to his breaking point and if he will get some help.
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I hope he’ll make it! 🙂
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Wow! Great take on the prompt. I feel right there with him, wanting the search to cease, wanting the freedom to have a fresh start, and felling anxious of taking such a leap in his life. Great great inner dialogue and details!
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Thanks, Izzy 🙂 have a great day!
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Really interesting story, love the questions and the guilt. Thanks for posting.
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always my pleasure 🙂
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A great story ~ The thoughts expressed in the dialogue are excellent ~
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thanks, John 🙂
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Very intriguing. It has got me wondering what made him run away.
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cheers, Francesca 🙂
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Great story- you can take this one further if you wanted too 🙂
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hehehe part two 🙂
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A good take on the prompt. 🙂 His life must have been particularly unbearable to fake his own death.
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glad you like it 🙂
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I hope he’s happier in his new life!
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we’ll keep our fingers crossed for him! 🙂
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Intriguing. Different take on the prompt too. The stories I have read so far are all about the people in the boat.
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cheers 🙂 happy to be different!
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