Looking forward to a new day with you and everything thereon
The mist is visible, out of the charcoal curtain is a perfect dawn
Against this milieu the trees are silhouettes, like oil painting
The colours of the foliage return to green, what a perfect dawn
The sky glows like honey and the sun is pure gold in the sky
I can see the path, uncluttered and I’m ready, a perfect dawn
Let’s walk with bare feet on the ground to feel the Earth’s energy
Hand in hand we walk, we can see our breath on a perfect dawn
A new day has come, new possibilities, a fresh page yet to be written
And together we can face it, whatever it gives us on a perfect dawn
(c) ladyleemanila 2016
A bit of rule-bending gone on there, but with a lovely result 🙂
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ooops, sorry! thanks, Jane 🙂
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No problem. You just invented your own version of a ghazal 🙂
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Aw, that’s lovely. Very fresh and beautiful. The dawning of love.
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thanks, Sarah 🙂 have a great day!
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I broke the rules too and trying to fix it. Fixing is difficult than creating. I think I got it. Need to update.
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it doesn’t matter if we broke rules…. love your Ghazal, Pranabaxom 🙂
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Thanks for your kind words. I am trying to update with rules as close to as i can. Will update in a few minutes.
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Lovely thoughts!
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thanks, Merrild 🙂
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I like this line, “a fresh page yet to be written”. It encompasses the very best thing about the dawn! 🙂
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thanks, Kat 🙂
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I like the happy optimistic feel you created. A perfect dawn has a nice ring to it.
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thanks, Janice 🙂
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