Microfiction challenge #19: Under the sea


under the sea where the mighty king lived
his hair lengthy and his body so lean
the king saw her and made her his captive

we would never know what went in between
why did she keep coming back to the sea?
perhaps he promised her to be his queen

under the sea, there was lots of algae
and the sound of water flowing over
folks said she was as pretty as could be

lady swam into the wide blue yonder
was it to be with him at his kingdom?
pure white beach surrounding the sea azure

sometime later on she wanted freedom
sadly, but there was no way she could leave
she was then bored and he was so loathsome

she kept asking him, he was getting peeved
and then he did something unscrupulous
something horrifying, it made us grieve

that was the anecdote under the sea
she was fiercely taken, she couldn’t flee
under the sea where the mighty king lived
the king saw her and made her his captive*

(c) ladyleemanila 2016

* The Lauranelle, created by Laura Lamarca, is a hybrid (variation) of both the Villanelle and the Terzanelle forms. The poem is 22 lines in length opposed to the 19-line length of the aforementioned classical forms. Lines MUST be 10 syllables in length and also MUST be in iambic pentameter.

Rhyme scheme is as follows: aba bcb cdc ded efe fbf ggA(1)A(2)

Lines 1 and 3 MUST be repeated at Lines 21 and 22.

Poems can either be formatted in stanzas or as a whole piece without line-spacing

For: Microfiction challenge #19: Under the sea by Jane Dougherty

7 thoughts on “Microfiction challenge #19: Under the sea

  1. I really like the poetry type you used for this poem a lot. Repetition really gets the point across. I also love you’re telling a story, like a fairytale. He captures her and even though she seems to get away or is released, she comes back. She must love him. But once she’s there it seems she cannot go. He is “loathsome” she wants freedom and he either kills her or rapes. Either is quite horrible, Great poem Lady Lee.

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